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This is only my second story, so please tell me what you think of it after reading, even if you think its crap


“In here” yelled Bryan while holding the warehouse door open. One after the other the two survivors raced through the doorway, followed by Bryan who locked the door behind them. Bryan flipped the light switches on, revealing an abandoned warehouse full of unopened boxes of food, water and other supplies. “Thank you, I don’t know how much longer we could have ran without stopping” said the first survivor. He was a small fellow, no more than 30 years old. “Yeah, thank you so much” said the other survivor; She was a skinny girl, probably in her mid twenties. “Not a problem” Bryan said, holding his smile back.

After the introductions, Bryan handed each of them a bottle of water and a few candy bars. The two were a couple, Peter and Sarah were their names. “Glad to see someone made it” Bryan said “You both were in pretty rough sha…” Bryans words cut off by a banging sound on the warehouse door. “God damn infected” Bryan said in an annoyed manner. He stood up and reached for his .357 Magnum on the table next to him. He began walking towards the door. Once Bryan reached the door, he paused for a moment. Peter and Sarah stared at him awkwardly. Bryan then reached for the lock, twisted it and pulled the door open. Three infected fell through face first. Bryan smirked as he leveled his Magnum to the back of an infected’s head and pulled the trigger. A loud boom echoed through the warehouse as the infected dropped back to the ground. Bryan quickly shifted his aim to another infected, and put a bullet through the back of its head as well. The third infected had managed to get back on its feet before Bryan could shoot it. It had turned and lunged at Bryan, but he dodged it with a simple sidestep. The infected went sprawling against the cold steel of the warehouse wall, slamming into it. Bryan took two quick steps toward it and fired a third, final round into its head. Bryan then calmly walked over to the door, closed it and then locked it. He then turned to see Peter and Sarah staring at him in amazement. Bryan couldn’t help but smile.

“How did you do that?” Sarah said in astonishment. “It was nothing” Bryan said, slowly sitting back in his seat next to Peter. “He must have been in the army” Peter thought, he had guessed that Bryan was somewhere in his mid forties due to his graying hair and short beard. “You don’t seem to be too afraid of them” Peter said interrogatively. “Nah, there nothin’ but crazy people” Bryan replied while handing them both cups of water “But dumber“. After about an hour of chit-chat Bryan slowly stood up, then said “Its getting late, we should get some rest”. The other two nodded. Bryan showed them to there makeshift beds, both neatly made in the corner of a small windowless room in the warehouse. Bryan sat a lamp on a table in the opposite corner. “Sleep well” he said while walking to the door. “Goodnight” Peter and Sarah replied. Bryan then flicked the lights off and closed the door.

“Wake up!” said Bryan as he threw a bucket of water over the restrained couple. Peter and Sarah both gasped for air as the frigid water met their skin. Peter and Sarah were tied back-to-back, both sitting on chairs in the middle of the warehouse. “What the fuck is this?” Peter nervously asked. “I slipped a few sleeping pills in you’re drinks last night, sorry about that” Bryan replied with a big grin on his face. Bryan drew a very sharp KA-BAR knife from the sheath attached to his belt. Bryan stepped towards Peter and lightly pressed the knife against his neck. “Oh my god, what are you doing?” Peter asked in a frightened tone. “Showing you how it feels” answered Bryan. Peter and Sarah both went pale as Bryan raised the knife, but they were then interrupted by more banging on the warehouse door. Bryan rolled his eyes as he turned towards the noise. Bryan unholstered the Magnum as he began walking towards the door. Bryan unlocked the door and in came two of the infected. Bryan quickly aimed for the closest head and fired, brain matter painted the floor. As the second infected jumped up Bryan fired a round into its kneecap, dropping it to the ground. Bryan smashed his boot on the infected’s head, sending blood all around him. “Well that takes care of them” Bryan said as he pushed the door shut.

Bryan was standing next to Peter again, knife unsheathed. Bryan’s eyes were filled with rage, driven mad by the events over the last couple of weeks. “Why are you doing this?” asked Peter. “To show you what I went through! Do you know what its like to lose the ones you love? Did you have to watch your wife and daughter get torn to shreds by those fuckers” Tears began to fill Bryan’s eyes as he went on. “I couldn’t help them, I really couldn’t! There were just too many of them” Bryan tightened his grip on the knife, making his knuckles turn white. “Now I’m going to show you both what its like to lose everything!“ The warehouse door then burst open.

A dozen infected came running through the doorway, all sprinting towards Bryan, he had forgotten to lock it. Bryan quickly dropped the knife and unholstered his Magnum. As Bryan fired upon the infected, Peter had managed to drag the knife over to him by using his feet, and had began cutting the ropes tying him and Sarah to the chairs. Bryan fired round after round as the infected charged at him. CLICK, Bryans gun went empty. By the time he started to shuffle through his pockets for more ammo; the infected were already on top of him. Peter and Sarah watched as he was eaten alive. Bryan’s screams echoed throughout the entire warehouse. “Come on” Peter said, grabbing Sarah’s hand and dragging her out of the warehouse. Bryans screams soon faded as Peter and Sarah made their way down the road they had come from.


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I liked this one. Is their going to be more about it?


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Thank you

And if anyone else agrees that they want me to continue this story then i dont see why not.

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Yes please do is a very good story.


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Sorry that i havnt added the next part yet. Ive been busy with school and work so i havnt had the time to make it. I will deffinately have it up within a few days though.


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Hmm seems to me its been more than a couple of days

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Hmm seems to me its been more than a couple of days


Sorry i havnt done it yet my internets been going on and off so i havnt started it, plus i had FCAT testing all last week. Im going to start it tonight i hope lol

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Alright lol sweet.

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I have about 3 paragraphs done so far, it should be finished by friday


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nice

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Im on the last 2 paragraphs but i cant come up with a good ending


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Very good beginning, I would love to read more.


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Ive finally decided to take the time tonight to finish the next damn part lol

It'll be up by tomorow morning, thats a guarantee

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Ive finally decided to take the time tonight to finish the next damn part lol

It'll be up by tomorow morning, thats a guarantee



It better Be.  

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Ive finally decided to take the time tonight to finish the next damn part lol

It'll be up by tomorow morning, thats a guarantee


You lied to me.........

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Aww. Bryan seemed like such a Protagonist at first! Then we went on and turned into a dick...

Interesting plot! For such a short segment, the suspense sunk in quite well! Very nice!
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You lied to me.........


Sorry about that, I've been on vacation for quite a while and I havnt been on for months. I was just browsing through my favorites and saw this site, glad i found it

But anyway Ill dig through my files and find whatever happened to part 2

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Aww. Bryan seemed like such a Protagonist at first! Then we went on and turned into a dick...

Interesting plot! For such a short segment, the suspense sunk in quite well! Very nice!


Thanks, glad you enjoyed it

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